<p class="ql-block">指导老师无为斋主人</p><p class="ql-block">2025.1.8</p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">作业：</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">1</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">出句对句</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">书中有味催人醉；（出句）求对句。</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">2</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">自撰诗联</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">出题与点评老师</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">赵显勇</b></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廉永明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味摧人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底生花伴梦香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底对书中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">、生花对有味、伴对催、梦对人、香对味，对仗工整，构思精巧，写出了文人墨客于梦中仍陶醉于作品之间的喜悦心情。很不错！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁小彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔下含情惹月羞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，形对意联，思路清晰，写出了沉迷于作品之中的雅兴。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">画里无声惹蝶欢。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：形对意联，对仗工整</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">，构思精巧，佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁金翠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">画里含情惹客迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗合律工整，构思精巧奇特，意境紧密相联。佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王占安</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底生花引客迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七绝 楹联情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底生花引客迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">结识才星腹添雅，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">奇文妙语把君携。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1，对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，联意相关，构思精，佳作当赞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2，联扩诗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">写出了作者痴迷诗联，醉心于斯的积极心情，第三句“腹添”二字使用了（锦鲤翻波）的格式，进行了夲句自救。不错！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘宽应</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨里含情兆韵長。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月色无声照物迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句1</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，构思奇巧，唯觉“兆韵"二字对上联“催人"词性上欠妥，（个见）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句2，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整合律，但意境上与上联关联欠紧。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘建和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">汽里无香辩水真。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">构思奇特，对仗工整，唯觉意境上与上联关联欠紧。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">武达</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔下含情惹众怜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">构思独特，对仗工整，表意清晰。佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：画里无声任尔狂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 一一郭保旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">形对意联，对仗工整，构思精巧，佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笛里多情动客愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思路开阔，对仗工整，悠扬的笛声勾起了客居他乡之人的思乡情结。但觉得意境上与上联内容相关欠紧密。（个见）</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">崔晓清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1出句对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">园间飘香惹蝶来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2出句对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">溪涧游鱼逗客欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句1，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">构思奇特，对仗合律，意境优美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句2，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗合律，构思精巧，感觉“溪涧"与“游鱼”二者与上联对应词性欠当。（个见）</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郝建富</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梦里生情润客思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对仗合律，构思奇巧，唯觉竟境上与上联相关欠紧。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">砚上生花笑我痴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">心底藏阳放眼明。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句1，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，形对意联，上下联紧密相联佳，佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句2，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">构思精巧，对仗合律，心中有阳光，眼界更开阔。佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本期作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">温丕彪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1，出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底传神发古思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2，嵌联诗•七绝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 无 题</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 韵/四支平</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底传神发古思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日解笠翁三两句，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">毋须驰马谒良师。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1、对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，构思精巧，意境相联，佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2、联扩诗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗中引用了明末清初诗人李渔的“笠翁对韵”，写出了作者醉心于诗联，博古通今，老年之人有此恒心，实属难能可贵。为佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程永红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">茶里藏情使客欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗合律，意境关联，构思精准，佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郭彩萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔底生情惹我痴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，思路清晰，意境相联，“痴”字对“醉”字尤为贴切，佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵文英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">画里无奇引蝶飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，构思精巧，意境相联，感觉把“奇”字改为“香”字更贴切。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">许晋武</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔下多情笑我痴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，构思精巧，表意清晰，意境相联，佳作当赞。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">闫秀萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山里藏珍任尔寻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗合律，构思奇特，表意清晰，唯觉意境上与上联相联欠紧。</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王海良作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一 出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">酒里无忧入梦香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二 自撰诗联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联贺平遥作协首届会议胜利召开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一届春风，点翠古陶，骚坛焕彩流佳韵；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千枝椽笔，描红华夏，豪气冲天谱锦章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1、对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，构思精准，意境优美，佳联当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2、自撰联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗合律，意境优美，构思精巧，佳作当赞！</span></p> 🟥️🟥️🟥️ <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书中有味催人醉：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">画里无声惹尔痴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：本联对仗工整，形对意联，表达了作者对书画作品的陶醉、痴迷与热爱之情。佳对。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评老师闫秀萍</span></p>