<p class="ql-block">2024.12.4</p> <p class="ql-block">指导老师无为斋主人</p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">1</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">出句与对句</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">出句：寒风入座惊花落：</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">对句：</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">2</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">自撰诗联</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">出题与点评老师王海良</b></p> <p class="ql-block"> </p><p class="ql-block"> ◎◎◎ <—><>◎◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘红作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：皓月侵怀忆子还。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰诗联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为东泉镇常村作联：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">南北通桥，玉杏绕琴溪，灵蛇吐瑞传佳话；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东西有庙，老槐荫古堡，彩凤来仪庇后人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.题图联（自选）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题联竹子图</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一枝秀竹芊芊立，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">满卷新词脉脉生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.对句工整对仗，表意略逊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰联写的很精彩，白描勾勒，故乡牵心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.题图联跑题了，咱们发的是红柿瓦房图。不过写的也不错，诗家语满满。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">…………………………</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">细雨敲窗扰夜思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：工整对仗，修辞相谐。出句是晚秋近初冬景色，冷雨是否又适合时令呢。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>****◎◎◎◎◎**</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王晓娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">残月浮空照草飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：平仄合律，拟人修辞不到位。语意逻辑略显晦涩。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>◎◎◎&&&&&&&◎◎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨敲窗扰夜思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：工整对仗，修辞相谐。叙事形象，用词恰当，佳对。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">*…………………………*</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王占安</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨敲窗骇燕呢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七绝 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 悯农</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨敲窗骇燕呢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今夜寒潮袭古堡，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梨农肃立若木鸡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句形象生动，工整对仗，两次拟人修辞到位，佳对！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七绝启承转合衔接自然，文人情怀，溢于笔端，佳诗。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎&◎&◎&◎&</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁金翠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">朗月穿林扰鸟栖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句合规合矩，小类对比较考究，穿字精彩，可见练字是用了心的。佳对！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎……◎……◎……</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廉永明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1明月浮影移竹摇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2朝霞深树映果肥</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句1：内容写的很诗意，可惜影字出律，当句内失替。咱们一般依马蹄韵，偶字位置是：平仄平仄平仄……这样平仄更替的，就像马跑路的踢踏踢踏声。建议学习一下对联＂宪法＂《联律通则》。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句2：逻辑模糊，对联六要素很缺失，不过精神可嘉，多练多写多学定会有更大的提升。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">另外对联一定要有标点符号，上联分号，下联句号，加油！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">……◎……◎……◎◎……</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句A：老树摇头叹叶飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句B：霜柿张灯听鸟喧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：高手出手，精神抖擞！对句A形对意联，形象生动，合情合理！把寒秋的景象拓展到了极致！摇头，叹，炼字精到，韵味十足！妙联！必推元卷！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句B同样精彩，修辞溢韵，生动形象，赏罢令人回味无穷，爱不释口！好联！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">……◎……◎……◎……◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">武达</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暖日爬山看佃忙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句工整对仗，修辞相谐。出句冷色，对句反对，用了暖色，这样对句更能远离合掌。对句情怀满满，把晚秋写的生动具象，佳对。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">…+…+…+…+…+…—</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘建和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风落座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨飞枝嚇鸟飞。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨浇田促籽眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：上对句工整对仗，形象生动。只是依常识来看，冷雨嚇鸟飞有点牵强。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">下对句促字炼的不错，眠也很生动。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">&—&—&—…&—</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郭彩萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">凉月有心伴雁归。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句平仄相谐，词性对品，只是凉月／雁归，从逻辑上欠合理。归改栖如何。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">*～*～*～*～*～*～</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">张期望</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">好雨无声润物生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晓月拂帘唤梦回。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：上对句平仄合律，意境丰盈。只是花已落，物今生，不符合常识，似乎是诗圣之《春夜喜雨》的变意，疑有隔景之嫌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">下对句晓月拂帘惊醒梦中人，形象生动，佳联。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">◎*◎*◎*◎*◎*</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">许晋武</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷月窥窗照影孤。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句色调统一，悲愁主题协调一致，说明作者审题是用了心的，这样便不会跑题，把出对句很好地圈在了同一个框架内。窥字犹妙，佳对！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">……+………+………+…</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑞雪飞临换世容</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：首先说一下，赵老师犯了个低级错误：对联标点飞哪儿了！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句形对意联，合情合理，把秋末初冬的景象写的具体形象，佳对。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">&+&*+&*+&*+&**◎◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：枫叶含情点头辞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 一一郭保旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句形对意联，精到的修辞把枫叶写的生动精彩，含情脉脉，依依不舍，恋秋爱意，跃然纸上！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美中不足的是头字出律了。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">+*&&+**&+++&****◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程树兰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黄叶临窗怨色衰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虬枝悬柿夸红艳；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">旭日披纱比位高。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句工整对仗，意境关联，修辞优美。怨字可否改为哀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联形象生动，用词巧妙，炼字用心，佳联！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">&◎&*◎&*◎&*◎◎◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">温丕彪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">素雪敲窗报雁辞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.联题廉永明柿树图</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">村舍三更无夜月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虬枝四处挑灯笼。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句修辞相谐，工整对仗。敲，报，炼字生动精妙！佳对。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联：联想丰富，用词精到生动，佳联！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">&*&**&*&&**&◎&◎◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郭彩萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">凉月有心伴雁归。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句平仄相谐，词性对品。晚秋雁归，凉月多情，形象生动，想象丰富，佳对！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">……◎&……◎&……◎&</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">闫秀萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小雪巡山愁鸟迁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冬日柿树美景图联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雪后娇容尤夺目；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">树前红果更馋人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句用词生动，对仗工整。只是从逻辑上来讲，满山是雪，鸟要迁徙，是小雪愁？还是鸟愁，似乎主题不太明朗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联想象丰富，用词考究，自己独立完成一副完美对联，这是大家创作，提升的最终途径，而不是永远停留在只写半副联的状态中。佳对！</span></p> <p class="ql-block">◎……&◎……◎&……◎&</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁小彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑞雪下凡抚麦眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.题图联（自选）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">休言众柿涂脂色；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">且看一阳闹树梢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句形象生动，比喻恰当位，下凡，抚，眠，字字珠玑，精彩生动！梁老师不愧是农民作家，对农村见解独到，情怀感人。好联！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联是见真功夫的，它是融作者的文笔水平，想想力，对联综合知识等诸方面的组合体。联中涂，闹把物象写的形象生动，呼之欲出，好联当赞！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎&◎&◎&……*……*……*</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">崔晓清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暖日抚窗扰梦归。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对于初入联门者来说，把对句能对到遵规遵矩，巳经是很大的进步了。只是这个白日梦做的有点奇妙。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">&*&*&*&*&*…………</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程树光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入席惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微露观星伴月飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：对句天马行空的想象力，当为程老师点个大赞！露里映星飞月，妙笔生花，联想奇特，佳联！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎**◎**◎**◎**◎**</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联宝异</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入席惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">殘月临池照影怜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句中残对寒，怜对落，悲愁色彩有机地与出句融为一体，足见作者对句是用心用情的，佳对。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">&**◎&**◎&**◎&◎*</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵文英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">细雨留痕拂柳新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句平仄对仗，构句用心。只是花落时节出现柳新，有隔景之嫌。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎*◎*◎*◎◎***◎◎**</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">阴彩桃</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷月铺床扰夜思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句合规合矩，修辞相谐，冷月铺床想象丰富而生动。扰夜思还有推敲余地。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎◎**◎◎**◎◎**◎◎*</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冷雨敲窗扰夜思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：工整对仗，修辞相谐。敲窗扰夜思，有点费解。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">**◎◎&&**◎◎&&**◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宋红霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老酒穿喉催泪飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句不禁让人捧腹一笑，感情色彩很浓厚！天寒饮酒，天经地义。在异乡，酒穿喉，思伊人，意难收！情深处，催泪飞！对句让人浮想联翩，醉意浓浓，佳对！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">◎◎**&◎◎**&◎◎**&</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑞雪飞临换世容。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句形对意联，合情合理，把秋末初冬的景象写的具体形象，佳对。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">**◎◎**◎◎**◎◎&**</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王海良作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">A</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：冷雨露牙吓叶飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">B</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：寒风入座惊花落：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：凛气开腔吓鸟藏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰诗联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">悼李健生老先生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">通机械，好弦歌，悟优才颖，享誉十村，一代贤能归化境；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">善石雕，钟书法，技湛名宏，留芳百世，八方俊彦仰高风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联贺龙风诗社十三期开学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙藏虎卧，吐玉喷珠，韵海征帆弘国粹；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风卷云笺，扬葩振藻，诗涛奋楫颂中华。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.题图联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">身换新妆，小屋仰头簪玉坠；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">家迎喜事，老枝举手挂红灯。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：海良兄以上的点评言语真切，评价中肯，可见他不仅知识功底深厚，而且在文化传承和社会责任方面也是令人钦佩！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对于海良兄的对句，无论格律，还是意境都无可厚非，向海良兄学习。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">个见1：第一个对句中“露”字，我想到龇牙力度更强一点，和后面“吓鸟飞”连起来读也比较顺口。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">个见2：出句“入”“惊”是它出彩的关键词，两个字用拟人手法让“寒风”、“花落”有了动态和状态之美，并且有了承接。“吓”读“he”更有诗联韵味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宋红霞老师点评</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">**◎◎◎◎**◎◎**◎◎◎</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">闫秀萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小雪巡山愁鸟迁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冬日柿树美景图联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雪后娇容尤夺目；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">树前红果更馋人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对句用词生动，对仗工整。只是从逻辑上来讲，满山是雪，鸟要迁徙，是小雪愁？还是鸟愁，似乎主题不太明朗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题图联想象丰富，用词考究，自己独立完成一副完美对联，这是大家创作，提升的最终途径，而不是永远停留在只写半副联的状态中。佳对！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">改一字：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒风入座惊花落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小雪巡山催鸟迁。</span></p>