<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">二零二四年十月上社课，用三江韵写七言绝句。至少两首。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">收集并简评：赵以顺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">刊 头 题 字 ：牟明鹏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美 篇 编 辑 ：赵以顺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【刘先伦】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">夜游书怀</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">是夜轻风关上窗，忧思牵我至平江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">当时明月今还在，一叶秋声叹足跫。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">夜 饮</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">少年自信世无双，中岁胸装酒一缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">若是乐师皆睡去，谁人陪我唱高腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：谁不是被岁月磨掉了棱角。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵学鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">十一出游有慨</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">奔跑全凭血一腔，少时有梦达三江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">日行纵得逾千里，仍在猩红大染缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">十一出游自拍</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">千乡一色世无双，更有美颜描上邦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">若得华为三折叠，能教赤热满寒窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">十一自驾途中寄播州雅韵朋俦兼贺国庆周弟生日</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">云开播雅影幢幢，数点星辉伴月缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自得此间诗酒乐，羞从怀宝说迷邦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">房车夜宿红枫湖</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">车近村郊闻吠尨，窗间瘦月对青釭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">睡前借得一壶酒，入梦无分家客乡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">沙滩文化九月九诗会见庄红女史携遵义女子诗会群芳同台吟唱</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋深自得桂增香，句未吟成鸟作腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一队红妆倚台立，顿疑春返洛安江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">闻韩江获诺贝尔文学奖有感</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨日中原今外邦，却憎诺奖竟成双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">如将此奖颁夫子，木铎千年恨作梆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：光怪陆离 ，大千世界。何处有净土?何处不染缸?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);"></span><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【文受刚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">赤 壁</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赋诗横槊宴长江，誓扫东吴志满腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">孰料南风平地起，纶巾羽扇世无双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">榜 样</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">由来以德治家邦，榜样长留影视窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">工业标兵王进喜，农村模范李双双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：陌上人如玉，英雄世无双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【汪守先】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">红枫湖舟行杂咏（八首录二）</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">其 一</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">船行仰卧久瞻望，澄景迢遥入小窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">眼底碧流胸底梦，诗情汗漫涌文江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">其 二</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮舟泛泛彩旗扬，晓日临波愁满腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">非是千寻高坝锁，大河颠跌总通江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：行舟湖上，卧舱以观远山。枕水听涛，潇洒尤似出尘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵以顺】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">题月窥窗图</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风无倦意夜无双，一树琼花到北窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">阵阵幽香浮玉案，月华如练入银缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">甲辰七师妹家师门欢聚夜饮</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风细柔柔月上窗，迢迢千里到沅江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">十年痴盼终成聚，对饮师门酒一缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">江 秋</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">离愁缱绻到蓬窗，落寞衰条风满江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">应是不禁寒凉意，沙头惊起影双双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">无 题</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">痴痴沾墨对寒釭，甘蔗汁多气未降。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">炖炸烤煎任烹饪，平头百姓少开腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：拙作</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【梁正森】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">十一回老宅理旧物得句，用赵兄韵</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">年少曾经血满腔，诗多妄语卫家邦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">而今豪气消磨尽，那有心情怨染缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">十一宅家有感</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">处处笙歌说上邦，强军利器世无双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">镰刀韭菜同心乐，仿佛闻人制酱缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">惊觉欠身闻吠尨，暗风吹雨竹摇窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">半生牛马惊回首，大道无形入酱缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">迟桂花</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">往年金桂已盈窗，今岁重阳未肯降。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">眼见黄花舒蕊冷，满城争看桂影幢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">花 腔</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">闭门觅句限三江，搜尽枯肠借酒缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">叵耐胸中无点墨，东拦西扯耍花腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：畅意诗酒，只谈风月。岂不快哉！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【唐嘉诚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">重九杂感</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一缕清芬振本邦，文风偏起乐安江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">薄明即在三公侧，句读经巢续剃缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">《遵义府志》</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学人评议世无双，术界何曾覆酱缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自此高山安可仰，执牛耳者响岩邦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：先贤大儒，辉耀热土。文脉在兹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【谢 勇】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">甲辰九月九日晚归二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">射波寒月影幢幢，万斛愁怀掷冷江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">窘迫生涯浑不易，归巢倦羽尚成双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">微风略略拨秋江，收歇归家人影双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">怀抱吉他轻理曲，逗留残月近纱窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：生活虽苦，但有人不离不弃长伴左右 。何其幸福！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【罗洪涛】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:20px;">内 卷</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雨瘦繁华寒浸里，烟熏棚皱影愁江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">门头新换摇旗乱，困数三轮塞北腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:20px;">宵 夜</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">拦门唱酒香难拒，叠碗吹瓶醉也扛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">廊外裙呼何处息，鼾声扶地两三双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：人间之烟火气。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">红岩古渡</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昔从此渡过乌江，放棹清波水击撞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">船到中流奇险处，愕眉皱起两三双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"> </p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;"> 送 别</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一束秋光破晓窗，把袂温言影一双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">何故今朝憔悴甚，难舍夫君去浙江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：前者潇洒，击水中流。后者离愁，尽不言中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【周国庆】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">观张祖其先生残荷图有题</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白露凝霜分晓色，西风漫卷破晴窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横塘雁唳荷衣瘦，似和秋声说渡江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">秋雨数日，夜阑，忽见长空月渐圆，时九月十二日也</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">连日阴风催雨淙，昏灯下魅影幢幢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">时人不解天心事，忽见清凉月满窗，</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">致谭兄世彬</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">故人屡抒感时语，诉尽伤心事一腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我亦因之有所寄，何如把盏酹秋江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：一首横塘雁唳荷衣瘦，似和秋声说渡江。好一幅江上秋景图。画面感十足！二首似有影射，一笑。三首，致人亦致己，同样戚戚焉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">南白十字街偶遇同窗</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">相逢时昔日同窗，便往他家酒一缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">拱手出门秋月冷，霓虹灯下影成双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">夜宿湘江</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风从岳麓下湘江，此地当年是楚邦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">指点河山今往矣，沙洲冷月照蓬窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：前者结句白描入妙，若见明鹏本色，醉态可掬。后者沉郁苍劲，令人遐想。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【庄 红】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:20px;">桂 花</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">月落寒枝风不静，青帘半掩影幢幢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">平添一味萦深户，知是天香落小窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:20px;">菊 花</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">独驻霜篱远世邦，从容姿色淡无双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">长宵露重空怜瘦，冷蕊枝头未肯降。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：咏物体人，可见诗者风骨。尘世熙熙，纵有千种风情，更与何人说。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【廖德勋】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">甲辰季秋频繁赴筑二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">过乌江</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">可容白发羞霜叶，不许忧心上脸庞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诗酒生涯活成狗，秋凉几度过乌江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">无 题</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">廿七年前酒染缸。至今不惯贵阳腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">吾虽辗转穷生计，住店仍须要有窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：前者苍凉隐忍 ，后者诙谐幽默。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【张 雨】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">月下作吟二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">已是三更风叩窗，笔成鱼尺梦成双。可怜明月秋浓处，不照离人只照江 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">闲潭落木影幢幢，玉户纱帘倚北窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">待到风来云弄月，鹧鸪飞去一双双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">评：寥</span><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">寥数笔，淡淡离愁倾泻而出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">【按】播州雅韵新进诗人祝西峰，诸君兴起，仍以三江入韵，临屏即兴调侃一组，可作情境剧观。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【梁正森】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">新来的咋不说话</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">新人何故不开腔，欲语还羞莫硬扛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">记得当年初见面，推心往往酒盈缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">天，原来梁兄又在打趣我哟。</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">臊得奴家快掩窗，初来面薄咋开腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">新人至少羞三日，不晓梁兄为哪桩？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵以顺】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">吃瓜群众</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">悄然偷听不开腔，你俩在贫哪一桩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">打趣新人还不熟，清风也笑月窥窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵学鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">迟迎新人夜半醒来见红包狼藉打趣</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">播雅本来连上苍，满池星月璨如釭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨宵我亦池边卧，却忘朝天开一窗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【罗洪涛】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">贺雅韵梁祝会</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">梁祝欣逢为哪桩，千年逸事可盈缸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">梦还惊枕情犹续，化蝶新词有几双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【文受刚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">有感正森邀西峰进群</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳阴结拜更同窗，共赏杭城婉转腔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">梁祝居然群里会，不离不弃影幢幢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">回文老</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">尼山自入便同窗，暮暮朝朝影一双。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">却忆三年清白处，与君化蝶过晴江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"></span></p>