<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙风国学院</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">国学院名誉总院长：梅欣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">国学院总院长：曲延波 李美权</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">国学院执行总院长：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">国学院副总院长：刘李萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1204分院院长：项新建</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">副院长：杜君 朗月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">教 官：王柏贤 洪彩娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">课程编审：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">授课老师：李华</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作业布置：国学院12期教研组</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本期点评老师：杜君</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美篇制作：朗月</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:王菊芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12-GX184-0032</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">①平起平收，押三平韵式:曲度四绝式·高铁(平声一东)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">朝西暮东，骋速如风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万岭千壑，飞驰畅通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:平仄韵皆准确无误，诗意切题，形象比喻，联想丰富，时空交叠，突出主体特点。起转自然，情感蕴藉。好诗!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">②仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度四绝式·共享单车(二十哿上声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">验证开锁，随心驶坐。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>街边寄存，便利平妥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:诗格把握精准恰当，文字表意信达，主题鲜明，叙议流畅，明白如话，非常好!赞!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:贺菊能</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12-GX184-0033</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">①平起平收，押三平韵式:曲度四绝式·高铁(七阳平声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翻山越洋，尽览风光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万里飞疾，心扉趣藏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:平仄用韵皆准且意境深远，自然畅达。结句“心扉趣藏”可再斟酌推敲一下。整体不错!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">②仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度四绝式·共享单车(十三阮上声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">客市游晚，无纠路远。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">单车喜迎，候你往返。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:格律无误，语言通畅，拟人修辞，情意绵绵。写出客之欢快，游兴正浓，意犹未尽!好作品!赞!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:雷宝珠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12-GX184-0031</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">①平起平收，押三平韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·手机(十一真平声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亲朋倍亲，世界如邻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遍晓天下，人生美醇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:对格律掌握扎实，运用娴熟，妙借古人“天涯若比邻”诗境，表情达意，酣畅淋漓，深味现代科技之惊殊!好作品!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">②仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·导航(十一陌入声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>越度阡陌，听从汝策。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">行车省心，惬意游客。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:巧化曹操诗句“越陌度阡”，拟人修辞，无声之处，自然流露，赞叹嗟呀。好一似孟德遇良谋之喜不自胜矣!构思高妙!赞之!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:雷颖娴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12-GX184-0029</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">①平起平收，押三平韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·高铁(四支平声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">长龙驶离，电掣风驰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">跨海钻洞，奔腾不羁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:用韵、平仄把握精准，基本功扎实。形象比喻，恰当拟物，视觉与听觉多感观、多角度生动再现，引人入胜，使读者如临其境，惊心动魄，诗情豪放。好作品!极赞!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">②仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·网购(十七霰去声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>日用家电，粮油米面。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">馐衣住行，网购全选。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:格律严谨，用词恰切。先叙具体再议概括，明确主体，突出题旨。语言质朴自然，富于生活气息。“馐衣住行”似不若就用最通俗之“衣食住行”更好，仅供参考。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:黄青山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12一GX184-0025</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1)平起平收，押三平韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·雪地稚子(上平五微)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梨花乱飞，大地生輝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">稚子怜雪，迟迟不归。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:充满童趣，化用岑参“千树万树梨花开”，以梨花喻飘飞之雪花，稚子天真可爱，贪玩不归，犹衬托雪之迷人，美境叠生，令人憧憬。真堪称佳作!极赞!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2)仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·雪地顽童(去声四寘)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白絮铺地，天寒所赐。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">顽童怨归，撒泼揮泪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:与上篇意境相似，但喻体变换，白絮喻雪，另有妙趣。动作神态，跃然纸上，儿童天性更为逼真性。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学员:常泰新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学号:LF12一GX184-0019</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1)平起平收，押三平韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·高铁(八庚平声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千山阻程，万里成行。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">纵骋南北，同得月明。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:诗律准确，用词恰当，主题分明，有气势，抒情慨然，意蕴丰富，思绪悠长。很不错!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2)仄起仄收，押三仄韵式:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲度式四言绝句·支付宝(七遇去声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>扫码支付，花钱适度。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">家常有闲，美满留驻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杜君评语:平仄无误，用韵准确，语言自然畅达，有劝勉，有祝愿，情意殷殷。对美好生活的赞美与向往，溢于笔端，让人回味绵绵!赞!</span></p>