<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">龙风国学院</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院名誉总院长：梅欣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院总院长：曲延波 李美权</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院执行总院长：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院副总院长：刘李萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1204分院院长：项新建</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副院长：杜君 朗月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">教 官：王柏贤 洪彩娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">课程编审：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">授课老师：史桂芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">作业布置：国学院12期教研组</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期点评老师：项新建</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美篇制作：朗月</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1204分院第七次作业完成人员名单：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">01王菊芳[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">02.雷宝珠[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">03.黄青山[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">04.雷颖娴[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">05.常泰新[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">06.贺菊能[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">07.[玫瑰]</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员；王菊芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0032</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押平五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·观武帝山美景 （十七霰去声）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横峰侧岭醉游缘，刻雾裁风景点穿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">唤雨金蟾扬奕采，神龙探海岁华悬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">长青古柏参天树，武帝祠堂雅韵研。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">盛世辉煌千载颂，渊源历史万年传。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，写景多姿，对仗略欠工，章法须自然。起承转合要有关联紧密为好！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）平起仄收押仄五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律•游大唐芙蓉园 （二十三梗）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>芙蓉翠柳青山岭，绿水清波浮倒影。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">喜鹊高枝瑞气祥，鱼翔浅底悠然景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">轻歌曼舞醉风流，画栋雕梁纹雅静。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">碧瓦朱甍万韵观，唐朝盛世千年境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：园景可观如临境，格律正确也无误，首句破题尾句结，对仗还少几分工。格律正确了，写律诗就成功了一半。对仗要注意词性和结构。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员；雷宝珠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0031</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）仄起平收押平五韵式（次格式是我自选的）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·游壶口瀑布(七阳平声韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">入夏时分暴雨张，黄河瀑布泛泥浪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">群山拱手来铺道，野马奔腾似脱缰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">近看波涛汹涌滚，遥听震耳吼声狂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">江川壮丽多妖娆，各地人民尽展望。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无误，对仗亦工，写景壮阔，尾句稍弱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）平起仄收押仄五韵式七律·张家界游（去声二十九艳韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">湘西胜地张家占，叠嶂层峦神造堑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仰望天门陡峭岐，惊叹御笔如长剑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">珍禽异兽洞流桥，瀑布奇峰花鲜艳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">纵使爬山苦累多，难能美景看不厌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>（天门指天门洞，御笔是指御笔峰）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无大误，唯“不”字为仄应平。诗写的不错，对仗还要进一步提高方能更上一层楼。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员:黄青山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号:LF12一GX184一0025</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1)平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律.赞油菜(下平六麻)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">不居都市享荣华，郊野田原是我家。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">冬至天寒呈翠绿，春來日暖绽黄花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">引蜂采蜜嗡声赞，招客乡游颔首夸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">养地增收黎庶奉，为农两颊抹红霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，对仗工整，语吐心声，诗风自然。为您点赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）平起仄收押仄五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律.临屏听课感怀(入声九屑)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">推窗觉地莹如雪，却是冰轮光皎洁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">天冷梧桐落叶飞，课停学子吟诗悦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">培桃育李奉丹心，授业临屏闪虹霓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学龙风俊馬腾，云霞满纸歌先哲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：平仄无大误，唯“虹”平应仄。起承自然，对仗工整。若作高要求，成语应化用。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员；雷颖娴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0029</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押平五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·华山行 (八庚平声)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">华山五岳险名盈，南北东西异彩呈。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鹞子翻身需胆壮，长空栈道令心惊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">悬崖陡峭天梯竖，峻岭巍峨怪石横。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">敬佩挑工精力硕，风光极限更峥嵘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">注: 东西南北指华山四座主峰，“鹞子翻身"、“长空栈道”、“天梯”都是华山上的惊险景点。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，对仗较工，颈联尤佳！诗述华山之险，准确而又细腻，引人入胜！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）平起仄收押仄五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·下雪天（六御去声）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">严风怒吼阴霾觑，大雪纷飞掀柳絮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">带雨梨花满院开，晶莹润玉姿颜著。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">银装素裹入诗情，粉砌琼妆成美誉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">最是天寒岁末时，红梅傲骨凌霜踞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，对仗尚工。用雨雪风吼之恶劣环境来映衬红梅的凌寒傲骨！转结自然。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员；常泰新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12一GX184一0015 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押平五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·赞雪（七阳）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒酥一陌野苍茫，玉蝶纷飞洒北疆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">瑞絮飘摇封两岸，琼花舞落锁三塘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">千山片片白毛覆，万壑皑皑松柏霜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">满目仙清呈景色，孤身踏雪作寻常。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语:诗作巧用了比拟手法，用玉蝶、瑞絮、琼花来写雪，高明！格律无大误，对仗亦工整，起承转层层递进，惜结句显弱！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 2）平起仄收押仄五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律·赞龙江（二十三漾去声）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白山莽莽叠千嶂，难水汤汤翻巨浪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">跃马鲜卑铠甲坚，翔鹰镔铁征尘壮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">先驱领帜抗联魂，血脉川流为国饷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">四大精神永续中，倾囊奉献红心烫。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无误，对仗还行。诗起于山水，继写历史和精神，后以“红心烫”作结，归于言志抒情。好。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员；贺菊能</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0033</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押平五韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律•雪景（押下平二萧）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒冬凛冽雪花飘，四野箫然美景描。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">翠柏苍松棉絮缠，银装素裹玉枝妖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">群山起伏神龙窜，劲舞天边首尾翘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">万物无疵光耀灿，五湖眸羡醉冰逍。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无误，对仗欠工。四联皆写景，唐人绝句有此法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>2）平起仄收押五仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">七律•雪柿（押上声二十三梗）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒冬凛冽天涯冷，万里雪飘描细景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">玉洁冰清柿果红，晶莹剔透风骚领。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">银装素裹赤心甜，彤体染霜诗意顷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">树毅枝坚野境欢，流连忘返迷人岭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，对仗未工。雪柿“银装素裹”又“染霜”隔景了。转结也似离题。仅供参考。</span></p>