<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">龙风国学院</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院名誉总院长：梅欣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院总院长：曲延波 李美权</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院执行总院长：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院副总院长：刘李萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1204分院院长：项新建</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副院长：杜君 朗月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">教 官：王柏贤 洪彩娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">课程编审：卢进海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">授课老师：毛金萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">作业布置：国学院12期教研组</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期点评老师：项新建</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美篇制作：朗月</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">龙风国学院第十二期学员</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">第六次作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">分院:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号： </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·题目（韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">平平仄仄平，（韵）仄仄仄平平。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仄仄平平仄，平平仄仄平。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">平平平仄仄，仄仄仄平平。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仄仄平平仄，平平仄仄平。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·题目（韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仄仄仄平平，平平平仄仄。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">平平仄仄平，仄仄平平仄。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仄仄仄平平，平平平仄仄。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">平平仄仄平，仄仄平平仄。（韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2023.12.2 20∶00前提交</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1204分院第六次作业完成人员名单：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">01雷宝珠[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">02.黄青山[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">03.王菊芳[玫瑰][玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">04.贺菊能[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">05.雷颖娴[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">06.常泰新[玫瑰]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">07.[玫瑰]</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：雷宝珠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0031</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·观金銮湾日出（下平七阳韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">黎明阵感凉，海岸露晨光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">万道朝霞映，千层大浪扬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">云天红似火，众客喜惊狂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">镜面沙滩上，拍张倒影装。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">（福建省东山岛是最近几年新开发的旅游景点，金銮湾的镜面沙滩看日出最美）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无误，对仗工整，情景交融，可称好诗！为你点赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·游黄果树瀑布（去声二十三漾韵部）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">醉美贵州行，心胸开阔放。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">山峦翠绿深，瀑布多奇状。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">震撼卧龙潭，坡塘宽荡漾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">西游摄景来，果树名声亮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">（陡坡塘是黄果树瀑布群最宽的瀑布，卧龙潭是最漂亮的半圆形瀑布，黄果树瀑布景点是西游记拍摄地之一）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：诗作记述所见之景，格律无误，可见作者诗词功底深厚！对仗若能更工整一些的话，更佳！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员:黄青山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号:LF12一GX184一0025</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1)平起平收押五平韵格式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律.黄山松(上平二冬)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">黄山绝壁松，倔犟展葱茏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风劲深根固，霜凝针叶丰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">俗尘涤云海，雅品出奇峰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">耐得千般苦，游人绽笑容。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：此诗前半段尚有精彩处，后半段随便了些！炼句不够，转结也较弱！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2)仄起平收押四仄韵格式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律.荊江柳(去声二十三漾)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">二月柳鹅黄，根深躯健壮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">娇条袅袅垂，小鸟嬉嬉唱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">临汎献柔枝，斗风拦巨浪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹心奉庶黎，舍己看堤防。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：此诗贴近生活，对仗工整，用拟人化的手法赞扬了荆江柳的品格！是好诗！为黄老点赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置2023.11.27提交</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：王菊芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0032</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律•思乡（七阳平声）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风吹树叶黄，郁闷赏花香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">思绪千般念，忧愁百种伤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">家园依旧暖，游子忆思长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">企盼春来早，乘车返故乡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">注：花香：桂花二度开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，语言晓畅，诗脉连绵，直抒乡愁！<span class="ql-cursor"></span> 乡愁人人都体验过，是一个永恒的主题！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律•看山（上声二十三梗）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登上北高峰，层峦叠嶂影。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横观飞凤台，俯瞰桃花岭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">领袖撰诗词，江湖浮画景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">群山万壑悠，旖旎如仙境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">注：毛主席三上北高峰，风景优美，撰写一首诗篆刻在石碑，矗立在北高峰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律无误，对仗工整，诗风豪迈，让人如临其境！只是，题目大了些，具体点为好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置交作业：2023.12.1. 13；30.3</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：贺菊能</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0033</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·冬湖（下平八庚）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">冬湖玉洁明，凛冽气寒倾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶残枝伴，枯黄美景呈。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风吹芦劲荡，翠鸟悦声鸣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">透视鱼眠水，游人往返行。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：格律正确，写景丰富；对仗欠工，还应加强。 状物写景要抓住重点，要善于提炼！另外，触景生情，要有所感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·贺龙元帅（去声十五翰）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">老帅立奇功，湖桑平世乱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">胸装胆破天，鼠敌闻风窜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">护国讨袁冲，湘川鄂黔捍。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">筹谋四捷歼，史册勋彰赞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：此诗歌颂了贺元帅的功绩和胆魄，格律无大问题，只是对仗欠工，炼句也要多推敲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置2023.12.1提交</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：雷颖娴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：LF12-GX184-0029</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律•洽川美(下平一先韵部)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">古莘处女泉，数眼瀵奇鲜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">百亩荷塘秀，千倾苇荡涟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">珍禽栖湿地，锦鲤戏清莲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">似入神仙境，游人不舍船。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">注:原古莘国现在的洽川镇。洽在这里读合，不读恰。瀵:地下无数泉眼冒出来的水形成象湖一样的水塘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>项新建评语：此作格律无误，对仗工整，是佳作！为你点赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律•云南游(去声24敬韵部)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">石柱露峥嵘，滇池平似镜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">观光快艇华，载客屏车竞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">涧下水清悠，街前花簇盛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">民歌对唱绝，跳舞同欢庆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：此诗信息量大，记写游云南时所见及参与跳舞同乐之事。对仗工整，只是“绝”为入声“九屑”，此处应用平声字，出声了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置交作业：2023.12.2. 11</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学员：常泰新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学号：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1）平起平收押五平韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·观看焦裕禄有感（上平十四寒）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风侵数九寒，透骨瘦衣单。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">夜晚仍伏案，公文刺促繁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">为民当尽瘁，废寝不觉难。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">砥砺行将至，昇平四海欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：诗赞焦裕䘵有感受，但欠精准。用韵无误。“伏”仄声应平，出声了。“觉”仄应平，也出声了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2）仄起平收押四仄韵式</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">五律·观看电影再见李可乐有感（去声二十五径）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">腾跃驭流云，听风逐雪兴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">倏忽雪散惊，恸喊无人应。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">化作犬相陪，闻者皆泪滢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">其情可感天，父女来生定。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">项新建评语：此诗用韵无误，但平仄不合格式。望细读课件，弄清替对粘的关系，按谱创作为好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">--------------------</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">国学院毛金萍院长布置2023.12.2 20∶00前提交</span></p>