<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗 会：中华慈善诗会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校 长：陌上花开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任：爱明、黄金岁月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辅 导：惜 往 日、如水人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">编 辑：爱明，如梦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作 者：律61班学员</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> （本篇各位作者已经授权）</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诗钟：魁斗格又称玉盒格。<span class="ql-cursor"></span>将两个题字分嵌上句首字和下句末字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本次要求：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1.以“夏荷”作为钟题进行撰写钟联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2.平仄格律符合要求。应多采用比喻、拟人手法使对联生动、形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">3.上联“仄”收，下联“平”收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">4.下联意境盖过上联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">5.上下联第5个字平仄分明，“5必究”。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. 爱明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜行舟邀澹月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微风拂面舞青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏虫低语吟明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短笛轻歌伴碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人手法运用得当！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.薛锋（如水人生）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏风入水追明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉露寻幽恋碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜池塘迎皓月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人凤阁赏清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：画面生动！形象！拟人得当！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.如梦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏梦无缘挥短棹，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨风解意拂清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏木葱茏栖白鹭，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴塘潋滟出新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：诗情画意！情景交融！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4.余明桂 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日当头摇翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香风扑面谢清菏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏风拂柳邀明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">朝露迎霞戏碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：拟人手法运用得棒！生动形象！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5.执着 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏虫丝吐潜银夜，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晓雨珠摇濯碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：描写细致！形象生动！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.竹林听雨 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏首白堤环绿水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风前岸柳唤青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏月循规陪绿水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香风任性拂青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人手法得当！景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7.上善若水 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏浦箫声惊水鹭，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳塘月色赞风荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：有声有色！生动！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8.木瓜 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨逍遥撩白水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红鱼自在戏青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：情景交融！拟人生动！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9.默 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨初晴迎紫燕，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红霞渐暖抚清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：色彩丰富！画面感强！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10.洛兮 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日清风扶翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天池绿水映新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">评：绿意盎然！凉爽！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11.王铭山 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日听蛙藏翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">幽香醉我恋青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：调皮！童趣！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.梦澔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日西湖迎翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋时保俶问残荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：分写了西湖两季的不同景色，对联最好统一在一个画面内！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13.冉近逾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日浓情梳碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">香风淡意戏青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏凉萤火争明月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜静蛙声伴秀荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：景中含情！有声有色！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14. 岁月如歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨邀蝉鸣翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清风送鲤跃新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏风梳柳欢新雨，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">明月撩波洗碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人得当！生动形象！</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15.臣民 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜青蛙歌岸坝，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微风细雨拂新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：白描手法，直接了当！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16. 夏花 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜寻幽蛙隐水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">轻诗唱晚露藏荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：诗意的夏夜！倒桩可用！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17. 怡然 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日薰风摇碧扇，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">平湖细浪吻青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：比喻和拟人手法运用得当！美！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">18. 春江 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日归来天上月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清风起舞水中荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：拟人手法得当！归来可再琢！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19.琼之岛 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏天紫燕穿垂柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水榭鸣虫戏碧荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日弦歌同品茗，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晚风舟楫共听荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：虚实相生，惬意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20.. 燕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏景婆娑迎彩蝶，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴光旖旎接初荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：情景交融！上联可再琢！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.玲儿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日趋凉寻亸柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山城对酒倚新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏虫难解多情竹，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫燕时怀雅意荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏枕清凉从翠篠，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨斟闲静逐香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：拟人手法得当！景中含情！赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.竹韵琴心 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏夜吹萧邀晧月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">熏风送爽舞清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日鸣蝉栖碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芳池戏蝶舞青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人得当！诗情画意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 开心果</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨倾情拥碧叶，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞泉觅友浣青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人手法得当！情景交融！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24. 杨柳依依 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨随心滋翠柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蜻蜓着意舞新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人得当。景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25. 天际云朵 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日青蛙歌恋曲，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">星空皓月醉清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：拟人手法得当！令人陶醉！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">26. 刘国庆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蝉低语临水榭，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">微雨轻飘吻新荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人得当！富有诗意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">27. 王龙超 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨朦胧滋细柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖光潋滟映清荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：景中含情！上雨下晴，最好统一画面！</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">28.清风 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏雨时常滋碧柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨风偶尔拂香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏花浓艳招蝴蝶，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨露清纯润紫荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：直白简单！直抒胸臆！景中含情！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">29.仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日微风吟绿柳，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晴云亮月赋青荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：两个动词赋与简单句子以诗意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">30.萝卜缨子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏草成荒埋曲径，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清波荡漾戏香荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：美景无人欣赏！可惜！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">31. 神采 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏蝉声远居高楝，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">塘埝风香醉意荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：诗情画意！景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">32. 李淑霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夏日骄阳迎绿水，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人亭阁咏靑荷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：白描手法得当！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p>