<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗会：中华慈善诗会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校长：陌上花开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任：爱明、黄金岁月、</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">编辑审核：爱明 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作者：律61班学员</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">（本篇各位作者已经授权<span class="ql-cursor"></span>）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要求：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1，不犯题字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2，离形得似。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3，对仗工稳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4，七言成联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5，不许叠字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6，形成意联。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. 爱明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">世情几变不容覆；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">故国重归空自贪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：采用隐字化句法（取自苏轼诗句“世道如弈棋，变化不容覆。”李煜《子夜歌》“故国梦重归，觉来双泪垂。”）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天作界盘星布子；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">身临玉阙意凌云。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：以名联化用对神话梦境，比喻切题。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 如水人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河汉界千年战；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">明月清风一枕眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：本句自对运用得当！词工意美！赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.洛兮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春秋楚汉盘中落；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日月星辰枕上书。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：本句自对运用得当，构思巧妙！赞！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4. 竹林听雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胸中黑白烽烟起；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上虚实意象来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：对仗工稳，语浅意深！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5.琼之岛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黄粱未熟犹经世；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">石室闲观已烂柯。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：用黄粱美梦和围棋烂柯的著名典故成联，贴切、工稳！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.春江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古寺幽居逢对手；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">空山独卧见周公。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：取成语 棋逢对手、梦见周公成联，意境圆融，质朴，有山居联的味道！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7. 全兴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三局纹枰争地界；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">双休虚幻到天河。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：白描手法直入主题，言之有物，贴切！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8. 岁月如歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚汉纷争拼圣手；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卢生富贵止黄梁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：临文触机，用典灵活！如果上联也用典，就更棒了！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9.如梦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方寸运筹千古业；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">须臾飞越百年秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：立意高古！将棋和梦的特点描述到位！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10.木瓜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玲珑破解当虚竹；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">公主寐求非慕容。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：以小说中《天龙八部》的人物虚竹 和慕容故事线索成联，新颖别致！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11.神采</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东山雅量羊昙赌；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">衰境清心鸡白逢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：化用《世说新语·雅量》和陆游《辛酉除夕》中的典故，立意高古！工稳！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.平淡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚汉硝烟眉上锁；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">功名趣事枕边游。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：很形象、生动的句子，言之有物，点赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13.拾夕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枰中杀伐由心布；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上庄周遇蝶迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：典故化用巧妙，用词沉稳！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">南柯郡里凤鸾缔；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">淝水城中黑白争。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：典故:南柯一梦，肥水之战谢安下棋。化用得当。对仗工稳！赞！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14.余明桂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神舟探宇挪星子；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">北斗巡航瞰绣针。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：用中国航天科技的探秘布局与中国梦的实现来表现棋与梦，妙啊！夸张手法运用到位！必须赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15.怡然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉枕黄粱终是幻；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河汉界本无烟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：本句自对得当，用词工稳、贴切！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16.风雨同舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">无声布局硝烟起；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有恨同衾暗泪流。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：将棋局的精彩与同床异梦的成语表达到位！反对工稳！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17.开心健康</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">排兵布阵平田里，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">过海爬山卧榻中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：白描手法直入主题，本句自对工稳！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">18.执着</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">韩信点兵方寸地；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">周公卜卦两千年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：灵活引典，对比手法运用有特点！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19.玉文</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河汉界刀兵起；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暖榻南柯鼓瑟无。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：灵活用典！一动一静，相得益彰！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20.清风</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河汉界狼烟起；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑶海琼楼幻境临。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：对仗工稳！描写抓住了各自特点！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上寻诗生幻境；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盘中逐鹿建皇权。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：白描手法运用得当，直扣主题，简单明了！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.二丫头</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方圆落子终无悔；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">幻渺流年不可追。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：语浅言深，立意高古！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑红将帅争天下；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">锦绣乾坤锁幔中。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：本句自对运用巧妙！用语新奇！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24.王龙超</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高一招逢凶化险；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">静三更得善呈祥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：一般分咏联的节奏是2212或2221，你的是322节奏，別出新意！本句自对不错！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25.刘国庆 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞马过河争地界；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浮生若戏绎南柯。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：直扣主题！比喻运用得当！过与若宽了些！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">26.冉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑白指间争胜负；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青黄枕上历沉浮。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：白描手法得当！语浅意深！用词工稳！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">27.仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑白指间知进退；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虚无境里有悲欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：言简意赅，对仗工稳！描述到位！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">28.夏花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 布阵排兵帷幄运；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 横空出世幻虚生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：本句自对可！横空出世还可再琢！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">29.玲儿 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方寸之间争胜负；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深宵虚中论沉浮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：用词新奇！将各自特点描述到位！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">30.一缕干云 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">闲观楚汉风云起；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虚现功名利禄来。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：本句自对得当！直扣主题！</p>