<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗 会：中华慈善诗会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校 长：陌上花开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任：爱明、黄金岁月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辅 导：惜 往 日</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">编 辑：爱明、如梦、默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">审 核：爱 明 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作 者：联36班学员</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> （本篇各位作者已经授权）</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.爱明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">镜自清高犹照水；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山含冷峻尽披霜。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：明扣。拟人手法运用得当，情中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">习习风来荷有韵；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">声声蛙鼓夜无眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：暗扣，一幅有色有声的荷塘月色图！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思牵关外，秋夜捣衣万户；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">独酌花间，金樽对影三人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：以李白的两首诗为典合咏，表达了月下人们不同的心境！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 黄金岁月</span></p><p class="ql-block">无缘玉宇桂宫幽，今夕何言，思君万里；</p><p class="ql-block">有梦红尘花径远，昔时此处，知己三杯。</p><p class="ql-block">评：上联是天上之孤清，下联为人间之常情，对比得当！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3. 惜往日</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">圆缺阴晴难自在；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">升沉来往且飘零。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：本句自对运用得当，借月喻人生的境遇，赞！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4. 如 梦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉镜凌空观世态；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金风入槛慰人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：拟人手法运用得当，情景交融！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">故梦依依，溶溶皎色流银汉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春情脉脉，恰恰君颜映玉泉。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：如诗句子，思情意象表达到位！赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5. 木 瓜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清辉飘万里；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">素影寂千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：从空间到时间将月夜之寂描写到位！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">皎皎如新磨可鉴；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">溶溶似幻梦长存。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：比喻手法运用得当！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6. 默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">疏枝饮露清辉冷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">艳蕊含香夜色明。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：如诗如画！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7. 瓁 境</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">入夜嫦娥思旧梦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逢秋玉兔起新愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：以神话传说入情，工整有意境！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一轮笑脸高高挂；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">半朵羞容浅浅生。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：拟人手法运用得当，美！</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8. 君 智 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">素魄溶溶明两岸，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人寂寂望扁舟。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：明扣。景物描写暗含盼归之意，赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一柄银钩，点点繁星独钓；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">千家渔火，茫茫碧宇同辉。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：明扣。弯月如钩，千家灯暖，景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9. 洛 兮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋水留诗花入梦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥送客夜撩人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：暗扣，传说人物运用得当！诗情画意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一轮明镜秋波映；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千嶂玉山夜影幽。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：明扣，月色下的山水静谧迷人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉女峰前波弄影；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鲛人海里镜含烟。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：童话世界里的月夜如画！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千涧镜波，移来四海升明夜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一池云锦，唤得三江共此时。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：境象旷达，升还可再琢，个见！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10. 怡 然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">午夜清辉疏影冷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深庭栖鸟语声迟。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：如诗句子！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒蝉静夜悲声切；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂魄中天玉露微。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：初秋的月夜凉意袭人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11. 杨柳依依</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒光细细金波浅；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉魄弯弯桂影偏。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：如诗句子！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兔爪乍伸，云端怯雁；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">银勾初露，水底惊鱼。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：比喻得当，生动形象！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.人生无悔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉兔多情欢万古；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥有恨梦千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：传说运用得当！人物付与的情绪各有特色！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉影荷池花醉客；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清辉柳畔景迷人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：荷塘月色美景怡人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古渡桥边，一川蟾影牵乡梦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒山寺外，午夜钟声到客船。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：以思乡之意象和古诗词典故成联，点赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13. 燕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉树依山藏百鸟；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冰轮出海映千帆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：对仗工整！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14. 执 着</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本自含情思欲断；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">不应有恨得长圆。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：将月的意象体现得很棒！赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15. 王龙超</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">帝女扬歌，广寒宫里嫦娥舞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神童举袖，清暑堂前玉兔倾。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：用典合理，传说迷人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋风寂寂，万里金轮光晈晈；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜色幽幽，九州名苑舞翩翩。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：叠词的运用增加了音律美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">苇影重重，十里荷花含玉镜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">馨芳馥馥，三秋桂子入冰壶。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：一个夏月，一个秋月，隔了！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16. 王全兴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天上寒宫孤兔寂；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人间广野铁牛忙。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：孤寂与忙碌的对比，很有烟火气！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17. 琼之岛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宫阙嫦娥挥舞袖；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乡园桂子逸清香。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：动静相宜，舞词性不妥，改广更工。</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芳草绵绵，水榭佳人歌婉转；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清辉缕缕，江堤暗柳影婆娑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：月下水榭歌台的美景表现得有声有色！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">18. 春 江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大海汐声遗玉镜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遥天暝色洒清辉。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：对仗工整！意境美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19. 悠 然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一阙桂宫似明镜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">满天星斗伴弯船。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：上联圆月，下联弯月，隔了！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20. 夏 花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛙鼓声声，水波影动寒光映；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清辉皎皎，菡萏姿柔冷艳芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：寒光映与冷艳芳词性不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.神 采</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉兔邀游，吴刚捧酒，盛请神舟来探密；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥舞袖，天犬迎门，诚留骄杰久居宫。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：将我国航天成就与传说相结合，妙趣横生！赞！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蟾桂众星捧；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江山素影披。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：对仗工整！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞花追暝色；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">倒影衬繁霜。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：比喻得当！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山峦倒映嫦娥舞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂影平铺后羿迎。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：传说故事情节运用合理！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">林中惊鸟鸣春悅；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江里游鱼逐影忙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：月出惊鸟用典恰当。描写生动！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂魄高悬，洒向人间影摇曳；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兰魂独抱，平生世外香寂寥。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：从月和兰的品性为切入点来写，赞！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十五中秋，影横滿院光穿隙；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">两三好景，香沁闲窗树列庭。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：景联对仗工整！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24. 五月的云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三五良宵开玉宇；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大千世界涌冰轮。</span></p><p class="ql-block">评：涌字形容月？可再琢！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25.刘国庆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清霜满地添思念；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浊酒一壶慰圣贤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">评：对仗工整，表现了月的怀思意象！</span></p>