<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️慈善诗会校长：陌上花开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️总编：牛栏草</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️成联主编：星辉，绿色的诗，温酒东篱，沉醉清风，乐水，墨泉，巨宝，同路人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️简评：星辉 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️美篇编辑：巨宝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">❣️组稿：温酒东篱 沉醉清风 乐水牛栏草 绿色的诗 婧翔宇宙 星辉 苏麻 墨泉……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">声明：本联集已经获得组稿联友授权</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">⋆⌁⌁⌁🌾⌁⌁⌁⋆⋆⌁⌁⌁🌾⌁⌁⌁⋆⋆⌁⌁⌁🌾⌁⌁⌁⋆</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【慈善诗会26度联圃】60期临屏优联佳对集。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本次练习，参赛者有选择的题联对句，择优收录美篇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">联意新颖的成联针对性个评，另一些出众成联无评即评，是希望留有更多空间于读者鉴赏。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">～～～编委联～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">牛栏草</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">展喉高岭，不忘老骥一身，旧竹一枝，桑榆虽晚力犹在；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">弃梦繁城，重种菜畦半垄，诗田半亩，岁月从来心未荒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">星辉</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫菊方开，东篱把酒斟秋色；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹萸遍插，北岭登阶祝鹄年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️自评：斟几盏秋色，遥祝安康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">绿色的诗</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹枫临水，黄菊倚篱，登楼一醉思乡曲；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">玉露金风，文星紫气，望月同吟敬老诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：秋色撩人，思乡敬老，气象全出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">温酒东篱</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">薄雾疏篱，独酌重阳寒沁袖；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清霜瘦影，怀人令节泪欺腮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：隽永佳句，唇齿沁香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">沉醉清风</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">辛丑重阳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只言秋染菊香，黄栌似火迎佳节；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岂料雨侵河涨，洪水如潮袭故园。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：一虚一实，真切可叹！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">墨泉</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高举目，霞涂画景；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赏菊兴怀，诗话重阳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：简洁有味，一字千金。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>～～～优联～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">水墨清芬</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">凉露苍苔，碧水惊秋，斜阳雁影栌枫火；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">暮云远岫，黄花照眼，佳节诗篇翰墨香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：诗情画意一副联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">望远欣蔚</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">望不断双行旅雁，一抹闲云，翩翩共赴登高处；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">算无休几缕秋香，半坡菊色，荡荡同来把酒时。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：细品极有味道，功夫了得，领字尤赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">李建军</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳之际观《长津湖》——</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">拭泪萦怀，万里青山埋硬骨；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高放眼，三杯菊酒祭忠魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：硬骨，改铁骨，结合电影与重阳，不错。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">绣春刀</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风力偏狂，笑看吹帽；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">阳光犹媚，醉赏插萸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：自然有味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">冰之晶 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高怀远，一杯浊酒遥相寄；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">对景添愁，三径黄花空自吟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：登高怀远，雅士孤影自吟。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>～～～合格联～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">边缘人类</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茱萸有寄归心梦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋月无言客路凉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：笔法老道，浑然天成。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">亦美</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">王维佳节吟羁旅；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清照黄昏叹菊花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：诗人入句，更添雅意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">子墨</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">邀君共酌茱萸酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赏月同吟墨菊诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：饮酒吟诗好雅兴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">胡鹰</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登楼纵目，万里流霞归我；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">借酒销愁，半帘钩月赊君。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：用笔飘逸俊美，题稍偏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">雪中情</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九初临，千枝媚骨吐霜气；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丝丝故入，一寸柔怀牵鹤颜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：故入可酌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">风中雨荷</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋晚人孤，西风一曲多凄苦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">山高梦隔，菊酒三杯空念牵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：孤影凉梦，珍重加衣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">一粟</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">霜染菊黄，呼朋携酒登高去；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风催日短，倚槛思乡敬老回。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：对仗工整，立意好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">张岚</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">金风拂面，玉露凝枝，游子登高庾岭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">枫叶流丹，菊花吐艳，椿庭倚望柴门。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：本句自对。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">王岩旭美新华 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳节日登高处；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">万里江山入画中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：下比犹好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">秋叶夏花</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋韵千般，万缕枫姿倾九月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">情怀一阙，三杯菊酒醉重阳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：对仗工整，数词精巧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">苏麻</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">菊桂同馨，呼朋唤友登高去；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">桑榆非晚，得酒题诗对句来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：对仗工整，有情趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">淡墨添香</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">对酒长吟，篱菊当风香暗度；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山远眺，越椒带雨果初红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：缤纷色彩，呼之欲出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">王诗媛</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">叶叶红霞尚满天，重阳漫步寻诗意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">阶阶黄菊犹盈眼，好景怡情度岁年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：前后分句缺少变化，有诗味，联味稍淡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">金蕊</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">百念动心怀，浮云几片轻轻绕；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">众生高目极，晴日千山采采收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">黄法</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九重阳，作赋吟诗需菊酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">年年今日，登高赏月在书楼。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">刘宝山</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陶潜赏菊常酤酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">摩诘题诗为忆人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">大漠胡杨 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赏菊庭前，一片思情飞故里；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高岭上，两行热泪落他乡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">仗剑天涯</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赏菊登高君有意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">题诗把酒我多情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">陌年微凉</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雾锁寒窗，酒醉无眠夜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">身依冷月，诗怀在外人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">叶落灼秋</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九月他乡犹作客</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳远处独登高</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">罗杨莉</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赏菊登高寻旧梦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">题诗把酒解新愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">原始森林</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山四野枫林艳；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">倚槛千枝菊蕊香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">青澄</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">东篱载酒迎归客；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">南雁穿云入好诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">云溪</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳望远登高处；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">万里怀人饮醉中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">人生如梦</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">观枫赏菊登高处；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">触景生情忆故人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">晨曦</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">佳节又重阳，携友登高神奕奕；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浓情加美酒，吟诗赏菊乐悠悠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">冷月清秋</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岁又重阳，慈母回乡亲故旧；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">时将九月，诸兄对酒客京华。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">枫林晚景</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">望远登高，重阳气爽深秋意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">相亲敬老，白发神清孝子心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">夏日风情 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">怀旧感新，菊酒浓浓当此日； </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高望远，茱萸艳艳又三秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：登高感怀，菊酒遥祝更好</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">～～～瑕疵联～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">紫嫣</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">采菊踏秋留玉液；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山远眺见琼枝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：远眺与踏秋词性不对品，远眺改为眺远。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">梁师谊友 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒露长城，北国千山失绿；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳霜影，南州万里藏芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：长城／霜影欠工，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">慧心缘</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋色渐浓，把酒吟诗枫似火； </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">故人将老，思乡忆母泪如泉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：下联前分句与后分句搭配不妥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">烟雨江南</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">年年福寿登高处；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九重阳忆故人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：九九重阳意有重复</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">张源</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九登高，童趣梦想身姣健；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">萸囊已旧，老叟雄心上顶峰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：多处词组结构不一致，词性不对品。不规则重字，上联尾句失替。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">李郢</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高望远，茱萸岭上随儿虑；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">对景思亲，萱草堂前解母忧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：意好，不符马蹄格。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">花边云彩</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">篱边白菊，佳期怒放重阳意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">露上丹枫，登高望远茱萸情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：菊雅枫艳，恰逢其时。下联后分句失对。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">东尔君</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九归真呈祥瑞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">双双返璞现安康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：上联失替，祥应平</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">娜娜磊</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雁影归乡游子韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重阳赏菊度金秋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：游子/韵与度/金秋，节奏点不一致</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">潮韵明月</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一点闲情，步步登高，邀友携壶共饮吉祥酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">几分雅兴，年年揽胜，临风负手同吟古韵诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：意境不错，吉祥与古韵词组结构不一致</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">婧翔宇宙</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹枫着艳，芦苇摇蓬，节令恰逢疏朗好；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">黄菊吐芬，草花凝露，世间最美是清秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">✍️简评：后分句多处结构不一致，节奏点不对等。</span></p>